jueves, 30 de septiembre de 2010

Christine's profile by Kevin

Christine is 18 years old and she lives in Palmares. She's originally from Guanacaste. Christine has 3 sisters and 1 brother, all of them are older than her, their names are Leticia, Florita, Liliana and Alejandro. She has a good relationship with her siblings.
Last year she was in fith grade of highschool, now she´s studying at the UNED
general studies but she wants to study at the UCR. An important detail is that she doesn´t know what to study yet.She´s kind of bored of Palmares, she want´s to be in another place. Also she is a very lazy person, some of her favorite activities are surfing on the internet, watch TV, to chat, use facebook but she also focus on her studies. She doesn´t like to go out, she prefers to stay at home. Her greatest achievement is the graduation from highschool and the CCCN.The best moment for her was when she finished highschool becuase she didn´t like it. The reason why she likes English, is that she considers that this language is really important in our lives to have better oportunities. Her greatest ambition is to have a job and a nice car.
Her favorite trip is to go to the beach: " I like when I spend time with my family", she said.
Her family is really important to her.
She´s a responsable and generous person.
She would like to be an athletic person : "I like when people worry about their health and want to be on fit", she said.

1 comentario:

Sitzman dijo...

Hi Christine,

This is definitely a detailed profile, but there are a few things you (and Kevin) should watch out for.

One main problem is the organization. It's one huge paragraph, and it's also got many run-on sentences (see my blog for an explanation about those). When it's a big paragraph like that, it moves from topic to topic with no transition.

Also, what would you change to fix these:
-she was borned in Guanacaste
-she didn't like highschool 'cuz of the people's personality
-she has a good relationship with her brothers

Take a look, and see if you can fix those and other small errors.

Thanks!
Ryan